In your groups, rewrite this paragraph to make it stronger, less passive, and more descriptive. However, you are not allowed to change the meaning of it, just make the meaning more clear and vivid and interesting to read.
Windy Winter Walk
The wind went around like crazy and it was so cold. The sweater was warm and it felt good and it was my favorite because it had a fox on it. I went on the trail in the back woods and there was snow on it. I imagined I saw a real fox but there was really nothing there but it made me happy to be there.
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